The First Love

Well, continuing from The Story of Stickman, The Legendary Hero, Stickman was banished from the Maelstrom Wars, forcing him to land on Rio. So Stickman went to find residents of this world. So Stickman found Jewel, Blu and their 3 baby macaws. They decided to join forces so they can take down Baron Typhonus and Queen Chrysalis. But before they can plan this out, they were captured by a bird capture heli. (bear in mind the B.C.H. is the anatognist of this story.) So they set the gang down on Yellowstone Lake, where they recide. until later on in the story. Stickman is running in Jungle Speedway to defeat the B.C.H., which is now possesed by queen chrysalis and Baron Typhonus. Little does he know that Jewel, Blu, and the 3 baby macaws are all on the heli. When he takes out the controls, the heli goes out of control. So the 5 macaws are flung out of the B.C.H., and so are did the 2. Stickman didn't know what do do. Save Blu, or Jewel and the 3 baby macaws. So he decided to save Blu. But when Stickman realized that Jewel didn't like him, he decided to set Blu and the 3 baby macaws down, and save Jewel. When Jewel looked into Stickman's heart and saw that he loved her deeply, Jewel kissed Stickman, thus giving him the abillity of 'Wing Spread'. So he used the ability for the first time, thus setting down Jewel. With Rio and Yellowstone Lake safe, Jewel married Stickman. They lived happily ever after on Stickman's adventures.

THE END.

You should split up your paragraphs, but other than that it's not bad!

CaptainKBX wrote:You should split up your paragraphs, but other than that it's not bad!

Thx! i worked really hard on it. i think the others should comment on it as well. oh and by the way, i got student of the month today! (5/23/2012)

The only thing i'm worried about is that the others not liking it, thats all.

Reminds me of some of my writing, way back when. Oh, also, Don't double-post. Edit your previous post.

CaptainKBX wrote:Reminds me of some of my writing, way back when. Oh, also, Don't double-post. Edit your previous post.

heh sorry.

did i even mention that this is a love story?

Once again, edit your posts, don't post twice in a row, even if it's later!

CaptainKBX wrote:Once again, edit your posts, don't post twice in a row, even if it's later!

Actually, we don't really have a double post rule per-say, more of a "don't spam the hay out of a thread" rule
Although i agree it looks messy

Shooting Star wrote:

CaptainKBX wrote:Once again, edit your posts, don't post twice in a row, even if it's later!

Actually, we don't really have a double post rule per-say, more of a "don't spam the hay out of a thread" rule
Although i agree it looks messy

My bad then, every single other forum I've ever been on has had one, kind of assumed this one did as well

eh, its not my job to know. oh well.

Although now Stickman is married to Celestia and Jewel, he still has to protect the universe from baron typhonus and queen chrysalis. Baron Typhonus mostly.

still... he does have to keep equestria safe from queen chrysalis and evil as welll.

Stickman wrote:eh, its not my job to know. oh well.

Actually it is required that you read the forum rules at least once before using the forums and I do edit it occasionally so check it every once in a while

Celestia wrote:Please refrain from making multiple post in a row unless your post is very long and you hit the character limit

I hate to be a stickler about this but there is a reason we have rules like this.